Comments - The Broken Angel

Search stories, writers or societies

Show More Tags

Continue ReadingClear All

What Others Are ReadingRefresh

See more results for ""

Never miss what's happening on Penana!

Turn on notifications

Later

Emma Bois

This was the only critic that came to mind: "A green dress with a blue sash? Those colors so don't go!" But if blue holds a significant meaning, I won't tell you to change it. I loved the description that went into the first part of the story and I could visualize it so perfectly. I do find it a bit odd that Eve has wings as I am so used to the bible stories of her and Adam being normal humans, but this is a very interesting twist. Keep it up!

10 years agoReply

Brettbaker1

hmmm...maybe your right about th colours, its not symbolic so ill change them, green and black?

10 years agoReply

Emma Bois

@Brettbaker1, that does sound better.

10 years agoReply

Eve Black

Wow! This is really good! Update sooner...PLEASE!

10 years agoReply

Lonescript

That was certainly a very interesting and I have to say I may become obsessed, I am glad to give you my support through this (I'm guessing) long journey. You truly do have a gift.

10 years agoReply

Brettbaker1

thanks for the support! If you have any feedback regarding anything you dont like, o improvements or even if you want a sneakpeek at the next chapter dont hesitate to send a message

10 years agoReply

Ernest_Scribbler

Interesting written and very detailed. Keep it up! (thumbs up)
If you need any information about sword fencing, don't hesitate to ask, because I've done few years (épée) fencing.
Cheers!

10 years agoReply

Brettbaker1

hmmm...I was thinking about doing a fencing scene...might not happen but I could take you up on your offer at some point.

10 years agoReply

Brettbaker1

Oh and thanks for the like

10 years agoReply

Back to Story