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Nice pacing for this first chapter, as well as details! I could picture exactly what was happening while I was reading. Like some kind of movie. 

In the US, we generally put commas in the quotations, but I don't know about anywhere else: 

"Jones," he responded. 

With the 'he' not capitalized after a comma. 

Other than that, good chapter!