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snowball
這主角被虐的好慘啊 才第九章就家破人亡了 只剩下視障妹妹陪他了，接下來應該就是重整旗鼓 一邊打精怪一邊冒險吧 還有 如果要讓一大堆新角色出場你的描寫建議再豐富一點 一下多三四個同事出現 想像上跟不上你的文字節奏
2 years agoReply
庫茶子
@snowball,歐給～我修改了一下，多添一些主角內心的對白，讓節奏不會那麼快。

梗🤣：
魯夫：我要成為海賊王！

林雨廣：我家破人亡！
2 years agoReply
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